hi first time writing a critique in here. >< (oh and i found your work form CRfolder)
so'bout the drawing: one immediate problem i see is that they are not...distinct enough. maybe make use of shadows and highlights to define the edges and other places, eg neck, and you missed out shadows of clothes onthe people
and yeah you pointed out the fire, try drawing with more, flowy shapes, and fire usually has a few tones of colours.
overall i like your detail in hair and their features, goodjob onthat, and your positioning?(the right word suddenly escapes me now) is great
My shading is a huge weakness of mine. Im horrible at it. And I dont even want discuss the fire... >.> Im not sure why I even left it. lol
Anywho! Thanks! This was really helpful!